Your copywriting subheads – powerhouses or weak as water. . .

After your headline, PS and opening paragraph your subheads are vital to the success of your letter or web page and in a moment I’ll let you into a neat trick on how to check their effectiveness.

Subheads have two crucial, seemingly opposite, functions in your copywriting. If they don’t fulfil these then they are just ‘eye-candy’ breaking up the main body of your text rather than accomplishing an important role in your sales copy.

Do Your Subheads Facilitate Flow?

You already know that the purpose of your main headline is to capture your reader’s attention and intrigue or persuade them to read the first paragraph of your letter.

Your subheads have a similar function – they should draw the reader naturally from the previous paragraph and smoothly into the next. Sometimes they introduce the next focus point of your letter. It’s important to keep that connection; using subheads to jump about from topic to topic confuses and can repel your reader.

Used in this way it makes reading long sales copy particularly easier for the detailed person.

Do Your Subheads Halt Your Reader?

Your subheads should be able to stop your reader in their tracks.

Now this may seem like a contradiction to what I’ve just said. But it is just as important and, in fact, well written subheads do complete both roles.

The type of reader I’m thinking of is the skimmer. Someone who reads the headline, is interested, reads your first paragraph and then skims through the rest of your copy to see what it is about.

The purpose of your subhead is to get the critical points of your message across and magnetically compel the skimmer to stop and read important sections.

In essence, reading just your subheads should deliver your message – certainly enough to appeal to your prospect so they take the action you want and have clearly signposted.

I have had people phone me and say “Your letter was very long, I didn’t read it all but I did get the gist of it.” And that’s fine with me because the ‘gist’ was enough to get them to take action.

Without powerful ‘story-telling’ subheads they would never have got the gist, because they would not have read the main body text.

Creating Powerful Subheads

As I said, subheads should give the gist of your offer whilst – at the same time – drawing your reader through your letter.

If you start your copywriting session developing a large selection of potential headlines you’ll often find many you can adapt into subheads.

Check your swipe file for inspiration on subheads that have been used in successful letters and direct response adverts (you do have a swipe file, don’t you? See my previous post: Your unlimited copywriting resource)

After writing your sales letter check your main body text; is there a phrase within the paragraph that is more powerful than the subhead you have used?

Check How Effective Your Subheads Are… A Neat Trick

Read just your headline and subheads. Do they flow; would they attract attention; are they intriguing enough to make you want to find out more?

Here’s the neat trick I mentioned at the beginning.

Copy your headline, subheads and PS into a separate document. Now read them;

  • Do they tell the story?
  • Are they all strong statements or questions?
  • Are they compelling, even persuasive?

or

  • Are they weak and boring?
  • Perhaps they don’t flow or make sense?
  • Do they need a bit of tweaking or changing completely?

Give your summary document to someone else – who doesn’t know what you are writing about – and ask if they get the gist or are intrigued enough to want to know more.

Advanced Tip

If you write your sales letter in MS Word and use the heading styles there’s an even easier way to get your summary.

Apply Heading style 1 (Ctrl+Alt+1) to your main headline section

Apply Heading style 2 (Ctrl+Alt+2) to your subheads

When you’ve completed your sales letter go into Outline view (Outline from the View menu or use the Outline View tool at the bottom of your document).

Once in Outline view you can set the display to show your main headline and subheads only by choosing to show up to heading level 2 – press Shift+Alt+2

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If you print your document whilst displaying your subheads in Outline View you get a printout of your headings only.

So, tell me. Are your subheads working as hard as they should? Are they attracting and compelling your prospect? Or are they scarcely making an impression?

~ Carol Bentley

Written by Carol Bentley

9 Responses to “Your copywriting subheads – powerhouses or weak as water. . .”

  • Definitely Jimmy – a pause that gets your reader to stop and consider, rather than stop and move on, is a good tactic to have in your copy. Not always easy to achieve, although sometimes asking a question can have the desired effect.

  • You talk about copy being able to facilitate flow. I definitely think that it is one of the most important steps. Although there are times when there should be instances when copy should create pauses to acquire desired effect.

    Jimmy Sorensen
    Webmaster, iDTech Summer Camps

  • I love finding these little techniques – a throw-back from my 20+ years of IT Training before I went into copywriting full time. ;)

  • I am a big MS Word user, but I didn’t know the trick about using the heading styles as you have described.

    thanks for putting me on to this.

    This is a great way to take a look at the copy quickly to look the skimming flow over the headings and sub heads.

  • Any marketer worth his salt should be willing to test anything, Carol.

    Many, many times I’ve seen established “truths” fall apart in the face of inconvenient empirical results. Hell, I’ve even seen identical marketing systems (materials, processes AND people) succeed in one town and fail in another, just 70 miles down the road.

    That said, we do know what TENDS to work best – in most circumstances most of the time. And that’s where we start.

    In general an ad pulls best when it most closely resembles the editorial style of the mag – and if that has no subheads, then I’d imagine an ad with no subheads would pull better than one with them.

    The answer is always to test, test, and then test some more ;-)

    – Jon

  • Hi Jules,

    apologies I didn’t see your comment earlier – for some reason the notification didn’t come through. I’ll reply here and send you an email to be certain you get my reply.

    That is a difficult one, Jules.

    And I can understand his point of view about a letter looking like a letter and I dare say there are situations when having subheads could have a detrimental effect.

    Personally I like using them to break up a letter, so it doesn’t look intimidating to read, and to catch skimmers.

    Unfortunately I do not have a specific A/B test of sub-heads v no sub-heads. It’s not one of those elements I’ve tested. I have tested a long letter with subheads against the previous 1-page letter with no sub-heads, but that is not a direct comparison.

    If you are writing for the creative director then the final decision of how a layout is formatted is down to him. If he’s amenable to being proved wrong then you could suggest running an A/B split in your next campaign.

    It would certainly be an interesting test.

    I’ll float the question and see if I can find anyone who has carried out this type of comparison, but I suspect it is unlikely.

    Carol

  • Hi Carol,

    I’m a direct response fundraising copywriter and a big believer in the power of subheads. But here’s the thing. I’ve just come across a very successful creative director who won’t use subheads at all.

    “A letter should look like a letter,” He says. But prove me wrong. And that’s just it. I can’t find any split test results of a letter with subheads vs one without.

    So that leaves those of us who like them, and those of us who do, with just our gut feeling to go on. Any chance you’ve got some test results up your sleeve to confirm the efficacy of subheads?

    Jules

  • Hi there,

    yes it is true that making your headlines stands out makes the readers continue on reading your website. It has big effect on the interest of readers being intrigue with the headlines first and continue reading the whole article.

    Nice post

  • Thank you Carol,

    Very clear and helpful.

    Love the tips about printout of headings only and
    asking an outsider to comment.

    Any chance of providing a sales letter that is on the verge of being excellent and is then upgraded to demonstrate the full effectiveness of zingy subs that both tell the story and compel reading of the main body text or at least good
    chunks of it?

    Looking forward to your real live example,

    Chris

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